Leveling sheet

Peeeew!!! peeew!!! peeew!! the fireworks flew high into the pitch black night sky. The fireworks sounded like missiles were being shot all over the sky. It lit up the sky with blue, red, yellow and other colors. It looked as if paint was being splashed. Roger stood there amazed at the sight with his Uncle, Nan, Mum and little brother.

“Let’s light some on the road” said his uncle Tyrone

Roger grabbed the lighter and some little guy fawkes. He set off these little circle ones and put them on the road. He seen them starting to spin like balls of fire. They dashed all over the road.

“Wow!!! those ones are cool” said Zack as he sat down on the grass in amazement.

I seen our neighbours lighting there ones up too. Boof!! Boof!!! Boof!!! they sounded like gunshots.

“Let’s get the sparklers” said Mum.

She lit ours up and gave us one each. Roger was trying to pretend that he had a wand. He was acting like I was doing spells on Zack. Later on We grabbed the roman candles out of the box of fireworks. Zack held one and my uncle set it off. It glided into the sky and exploded into a fiery explosion. His Uncle Tyrone grabbed another roman candle and set it off. Again it made a huge outburst as it blasted through the sky.

As the night went on we had run low on guy fawkes. That night was a really fun night with my whanau and we got to spend so much fun with them. We had fun seeing guy fawkes all over the sky and ground. That’s a night we will never forget.

Element	Rubric	Comment
Ideas	6	Your ideas are good but I lose focus partly through Tha
Structure and Language	5	This is well arranged,  But some of the language could be change
Organisation	6	This is well organised
Vocabulary	6	You have used words that fit this piece of writing. Just some should be change to more interesting words like instead of said you can say announced or something
Sentence Structure	5	Your sentences are nicely split but some of them might need swapping and the words in some.
Punctuation	5	I don’t think there is not many to change this is good
Spelling	6	Your spelling is correct everything is